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Post  Sue McDonald Tue Feb 14 2012, 19:55

I would like to have a party, when I'm old and 5
one to show all my friends, how long I've been alive
I sit upon the hard wood chair, swinging back my legs,
''Susan, stop it'' mummy yells, ''or you can go to bed!''

''Mummy, when I'm five, can I have a special day ?
I'll help you cook the fairy bread, promise I won't play.
I'll mix the jellies carefully, not to make a mess,
I'll be so real real good, I'll try not be a pest !''

Mummy wasn't listening, her T.V show was on
all the words I said to her, through her ears they've gone !
I so would like a party, like all my other friends
play lots of games, have dress up time giggle and pretend.

Staring out the window, I see all sorts of things
Scamp, my puppy playing, chewing mummys mat to strings,
''all I wants a party'' as I cuddle up to Scamp,
hiding in the dog house, my tears make him damp.

''OHhhh Mummy, mummy, you tricked me'' I said inside my head,
''We're having a special birthday, I'm five, I'm five,'' I said,
skipping around and around, my hair gets in my eyes,
''Susan, sit down, Bernard tell her'' mummy sighs.

Fairy bread and jellies all layed out for tea,
cut up little sausages and little cubes of cheese
AND placed right in the middle of this special birthday spread
was the BIGGEST EVER birthday cake, ''Your Five'' the words did said !

I'm getting all excited, seeing friends I know arrive,
why did no one tell me, just HOW SPECIAL is being five,
presents on the table, lots, some big some small
OHhhh I'm so excited, can't wait to open them all.

I'm special, I'm special, I sit and swing my legs
but suddenly my specialness turns to dread instead
''Susan, where are you ? Your making me so cross''
I fell asleep in the dog house, now mummy thinks I'm lost !

Mummys in the garden, shouting everywhere
looking for the me whose lost, but I'm not anywhere !
Scamp licks my hand, he knows I'm scared,
Mummy's really mad, he has been in trouble too, when he was ''just a lad''

''Susan, where have you been ?'' as mummy sees us both
''everyone's looked everywhere, no tea for you just bed.''
''Mummy when I'm five, can I have a special day ?
with birthday cake and fairy bread and friends around to play?''

My mummy didn't hear me, just sent me off to bed
Guess I'll have my party with my friends, inside my head,
When I'm a mummy tall and strong, with a little tiny me
We'll have BIRTHDAY PARTYS, everyday for tea !!



by Sue McDonald..........15/02/12

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Post  jinettyx Wed Feb 15 2012, 02:44

So many different emotions in your superb story Sue!!!...Gosh...!!!!
The hope, then the excitement, then the reality of disappointment...
You are indeed a poet worthy of acclaim!
I went through every emotion as I read it!
You must write more!
group hug Like a Star @ heaven Like a Star @ heaven Like a Star @ heaven Like a Star @ heaven
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Post  Sue McDonald Thu Feb 16 2012, 16:23

Ahh thanks Jinetty, I enjoyed writing this one even though it brought up a few unwanted memories ! I'm just learning some of my ''ex mothers'' ''talents'' as far as those memories go.......not quite as ''perfect'' as her yet ....still listening a little to the nasties that were !!!! Thankyou so much for your beautiful feedback .....I don't know where this version of my poem is ?! Lucie has commented on the prompt page and on my portfolio I don't know what I've done it seems to be in 3 places....the only way I have found this version is on the ''scrolling side'' !! doh deep thought hug give flowers
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