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Sue McDonald
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My Vision..
Today I saw a vision
right before my eyes
such beauty and composure
it nearly made me cry
It made me feel like me
before the years flew past
when I was more a youngster
when the energy would last
I felt in another place
didn't recognise my face
just sat and watched the scene
words and actions just a fraction.....
..of what I felt inside
emotional and sad
though happy proud and glad
of the person we'd created
I know I felt the same
the day that you were born
kicking out and screaming
though composure not quite formed
Two women in their thirty's
a toddler by their side
dressed in all their glory
a bridesmaid and the bride
The vision nothing like
the two girls who used to play
barbies in the garden
on a sunny summers day
The beauty from you both
a mothers purest dream
with a precious grandaughter
she completes my thoughtful scene
Sadness yes has passed
have to leave it all behind
look forward to the future
trying so hard to clear my mind
Tiny drops of moisture
left my eyes today
thinking of two precious births
and the future wedding day
Today I saw a vision
my daughter standing proud
beautiful and serene
her happiness so loud
© by Sue McDonald........24/11/11
right before my eyes
such beauty and composure
it nearly made me cry
It made me feel like me
before the years flew past
when I was more a youngster
when the energy would last
I felt in another place
didn't recognise my face
just sat and watched the scene
words and actions just a fraction.....
..of what I felt inside
emotional and sad
though happy proud and glad
of the person we'd created
I know I felt the same
the day that you were born
kicking out and screaming
though composure not quite formed
Two women in their thirty's
a toddler by their side
dressed in all their glory
a bridesmaid and the bride
The vision nothing like
the two girls who used to play
barbies in the garden
on a sunny summers day
The beauty from you both
a mothers purest dream
with a precious grandaughter
she completes my thoughtful scene
Sadness yes has passed
have to leave it all behind
look forward to the future
trying so hard to clear my mind
Tiny drops of moisture
left my eyes today
thinking of two precious births
and the future wedding day
Today I saw a vision
my daughter standing proud
beautiful and serene
her happiness so loud
© by Sue McDonald........24/11/11
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Re: My Vision..
Ah Sue......yet another beautiful worded poem of a wonderful vision, that of your daughter and grandaughter.....magic!!!
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Re: My Vision..
Drop dead gorgeous writing Susie! I LOVE this . . . one of your very best!
Love ya, bev
Love ya, bev
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Re: My Vision..
superbly written... well done Susie-Sue x
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My Vision
Sue,
I agree with Bev! "Drop dead gorgeous writing"...and beautifully written!
Hugs,
Cheryl
I agree with Bev! "Drop dead gorgeous writing"...and beautifully written!
Hugs,
Cheryl
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Re: My Vision
Lovely piece of writing Sue, loved every word you wrote, so very emotional. Well done....
Re: My Vision..
Nicely done. I'm not one to repeat what others have siad, but I do concur it was beautiful.
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