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Birds in Waiting
In a field full of newly laid corn seed,
I spy a tall and standing stiff
old scarecrow, all alone.
Distance trees sing-along
as birdsongs are Chirping their
warning song for farmer Giles
out ploughing again to grow his corn.
The Crows and Ravens caw their
sounds waiting intently among
the rustling and whispering trees.
The Pheasants and Grouse all
but rush about. Running relentlessly
across the land, flying only when
Buckshot does bites at their rear......!!!!
Finches and Sparrows so small,
all but dart about, then landing
along the telephone lines sending
tweety songs along the line.
The Hawks and Peregrines do
hover above, do but wait to catch
that unexpecting mousey mouse
thats all but scurrys about the field.
A foreigner from the sea tries
to muscle in..!
This large and white seagull is now
a scavenger of the land.
The wise old Owl is a Tawny old thing.
Sits wisely watching all what goes on.
He sits and waits for night so he can
sight and fly about.
Now all the birds wait patiently
for farmer Giles to go for his tea.
Then swoop they do onto his field
and peck upon the freshly sown seed.
Ignoring the old scarecrow as they
laugh and chirp happily away.
© RichieO 2012
I spy a tall and standing stiff
old scarecrow, all alone.
Distance trees sing-along
as birdsongs are Chirping their
warning song for farmer Giles
out ploughing again to grow his corn.
The Crows and Ravens caw their
sounds waiting intently among
the rustling and whispering trees.
The Pheasants and Grouse all
but rush about. Running relentlessly
across the land, flying only when
Buckshot does bites at their rear......!!!!
Finches and Sparrows so small,
all but dart about, then landing
along the telephone lines sending
tweety songs along the line.
The Hawks and Peregrines do
hover above, do but wait to catch
that unexpecting mousey mouse
thats all but scurrys about the field.
A foreigner from the sea tries
to muscle in..!
This large and white seagull is now
a scavenger of the land.
The wise old Owl is a Tawny old thing.
Sits wisely watching all what goes on.
He sits and waits for night so he can
sight and fly about.
Now all the birds wait patiently
for farmer Giles to go for his tea.
Then swoop they do onto his field
and peck upon the freshly sown seed.
Ignoring the old scarecrow as they
laugh and chirp happily away.
© RichieO 2012
Re: Birds in Waiting
Yep Richie...thats the way our feathered friends learn to survive.....
A lovely story written with the love of the countryside..Well done sausage!!!
A lovely story written with the love of the countryside..Well done sausage!!!
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Re: Birds in Waiting
What a playful piece Rich! I love reading about nature, especially birds.
Wonder if I might make a friendly suggestion for the sake of clarification? In those places where you say 'all but', I'm left with the idea the bird is ALMOST doing something, but not quite:-)
For instance:
Finches and Sparrows so small,
all but dart about, then landing . . .
* It might read better, in these sort of instances, to eliminate all but.
~>>
Keep writing! You're a lighting fast learner of this muse. It's a joy to have someone like you aboard:-)
..5 ....Stars ..For ..Your.. Presence!
Wonder if I might make a friendly suggestion for the sake of clarification? In those places where you say 'all but', I'm left with the idea the bird is ALMOST doing something, but not quite:-)
For instance:
Finches and Sparrows so small,
all but dart about, then landing . . .
* It might read better, in these sort of instances, to eliminate all but.
~>>
Finches and Sparrows so small,
dart about, then landing
along the telephone lines sending
tweety songs along the line.
dart about, then landing
along the telephone lines sending
tweety songs along the line.
Keep writing! You're a lighting fast learner of this muse. It's a joy to have someone like you aboard:-)
..5 ....Stars ..For ..Your.. Presence!
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Re: Birds in Waiting
Very good poem Richy !
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Re: Birds in Waiting
Thanks you guys, nature is a great passion with me as well and would like to write about it has much as I can. Thanks Bev, the advise about the Sparrows verse I have now changed it....
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